First Campaigner Challenge: Look, don´t touch…

The first Campaigner Challenge is on 🙂 My mission which I accepted with opened arms and a wide grin is the following:

Write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “Shadows crept across the wall”. These five words will be included in the word count.

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional), do one or more of these: 

  • end the story with the words: “everything faded.” (also included in the word count) 
  • include the word “orange” in the story
  • write in the same genre you normally write
  • make your story 200 words exactly!
And I´ve done all of this: you will see an orange tank top, everything will indeed fade, I wrote the story in my Young Adult contemporary romance voice (or tried to at least) and the story is exactly 200 words 🙂 I am proud to present:
Look, don´t touch

“Shadows crept across the wall”

As the voiceover tries to scare the crap out of the movie theater, I glance to my right. Casually. Of course.

David sits next to me. Maybe if I look scared, he’ll put his arm around me. Protectively. I can be a damsel in distress. It does not matter that I’m 5’10. For crying out loud, I was  Juliet in the last play put on by the wonderful school drama club.

Suddenly, everybody screams. I turn my attention back to the screen. Some girl with an orange tank top is running up the stairs, bleeding. Doesn’t she know that she should try to get out of the house? Unless she has wings and knows how to fly away, she’s not going to make it.

David laughs, “Look at you, toughie.” I jump. The movie doesn’t terrify me but the little butterflies running through my entire body when David, my best friend’s boyfriend, whispers in my ear freak me out. I look pass him and notice her smiling happily at me. My stomach hurts. I concentrate on the stupid movie. The voiceover starts again.

“Before she turned into a monster, she closed her eyes. Everything faded.”

Hope you enjoyed it!  You should definitely check out the other entries there. I already read some amazing writing  and it´s really funny to see how we all come up with something different!

95 Comments

  1. J.C. Martin says:

    I like how you wove the movie narrative into the story. This looked to be a potentially romantic date at the cinema, and then BAM! You hit us with the fact that she’s the third wheel! Ouch. Great job!

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  3. Gina says:

    Good news! You made it to the next round with your flash fiction piece! You’ve been short-listed to move on to stage two 🙂

    Stay tuned for more info on Rachael’s blog.

    Congrats!
    Gina

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